Many people live in town and cities where there are museum that promote historical and artistic objects of cultural importance, but they don't visit them.why do you think many people don't visit museum?what is the cultural importance of museum to society.

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individuals are don'
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important role in
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it's not the same to live in a big city that
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a small town .
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and artistic .while, individuals are busy with their domestic chores and they are happy their sedentary lifestyle .
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it should be noted that Delhi boasts of a number of
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in Delhi in working .they have working hours and ofter coming back form home.
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to explore are places of interest, so they will definitely
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example,schools can give their students arguments related to the historical , cultural and traditional of their native place .
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will most parents to take their children to
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, local administration can conduct various exhibitions at these places to attract on local individuals for
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don'
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conducting
exhibition and giving arts and historical bassed assessment in school will help for students.
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