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Many people live in town and cities where there are museum that promote historical and artistic objects of cultural importance, but they don't visit them.why do you think many people don't visit museum?what is the cultural importance of museum to society.

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museums
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people
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 important to show various exhibits. a certain segment of society believes that
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 individuals are don'
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 important role in
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 town or in a big Cities .
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 it's not the same to live in a big city that
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 a small town .
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if you want to go shopping
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besides
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people
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visit
 the local places of
history
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 and artistic .while, individuals are busy with their domestic chores and they are happy their sedentary lifestyle .
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 it should be noted that Delhi boasts of a number of
museums
 and historical monuments , the local
people
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 in Delhi in working .they have working hours and ofter coming back form home.
moreover
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people
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the city
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 to explore are places of interest, so they will definitely
visit
museums
. on the
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hand, negative
people
 to
museums
 and historical sites
for
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 example,schools can give their students arguments related to the historical , cultural and traditional of their native place .
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 to,
this
 will most parents to take their children to
museums
 to collect useful information.
however
, local administration can conduct various exhibitions at these places to attract on local individuals for
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 don'
t
visit
 local
museums
 and historical sites due to, the fact they are busy with their life and work .
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condusting
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conducting
 exhibition and giving arts and historical bassed assessment in school will help for students.
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