Many people think that the behavior of professional sportsmen off the field is not important as long as they are good players. To what extent do you agree or disagree with it?

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opine that
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's
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outside the playground is not crucial until they are performing good in games. I strongly disagree with
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notion because
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follow them and in the near, future their personal
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will affect their professional
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too.
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,
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are public figures and idols for a number of
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. Their followers copy their habits. They inculcate these in their daily life. They try to copy their lifestyles. If their attitude is bad in their personal lives,
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will
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too. The general public adapting wrong
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is detrimental
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the growth of the nations.
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will be better if they behave well outside the ground too so
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will imbibe positive things.
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, a recent survey conducted stated that most
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people
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copy their favourite
sportsmen
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especially the young population.
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, their
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everywhere impacts at an enormous rate.
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, their
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outside the playgrounds will
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their performance
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the grounds and games in the near future. The reason behind is
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if they consume excessive
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alcohol
and drugs
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will put a detrimental effect. Their stamina will gradually decrease and their health can
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deteriorate. In
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,
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will
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their performance.
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, if they are into regular fights and ill
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with others.
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will
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their mental health.
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will lead to
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of concentration which is vital for playing any sports.
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, a recent article printed in an English newspaper stated that
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who were consuming drug excessively lately fail in their career.
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, their
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may not be impacting presently but
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will definitely affect
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the future. In the conclusion,
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are followed by
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public, their
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impact
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at
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a huge amount. I believe they should behave well in personal lives too because
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imbibe their
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and their
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will
impact
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their career too.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • role model
  • media-driven
  • publicized
  • public opinion
  • societal norms
  • brand representation
  • sponsors
  • inappropriate behavior
  • team dynamics
  • morale
  • personal accountability
  • public image
  • career and legacy
  • off-field behavior
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