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Some people believe that technology has made man more social. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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With the advent of
technology
, there have been many conspicuous changes in the way of living, communication and so forth.
Consequently
, there has been, in recent years, a growing body of opinion that the advancement of
technology
 has made it possible to make more social
people
 compared to the past. Being a rational mind, I,
however
, take issue with
this
 notion, for I am of the view that cutting-edge
technology
 makes
people
’s lives more busy, mechanical, and emotionless. Among the ratiocination to buttress my stance, the one that stands out deals with the downside of
technology
 as a reason for having too many workloads, resulting in staying away from social functions and responsibilities. To be more precise, in order to compete in the dog-eat-dog job markets, professionals have to do lots of work at home and there would not be accepted any excuse as laptops, the internet and other technical devices are available at every home.
As a result
, when
people
 bring official tasks to their home, their family members feel disturbed and isolated. To cite an example, 90% of the USA families are not happy inasmuch as the bread-earners have to busy with their phones or laptops to attend customers or doe deals. Another critical rationale in reference to why
technology
 makes us drift apart from social lives is necessarily synonymous with addicting to virtual
friends
, who, more often than not, do not care for us.
In other words
, to have an opportunity to establish relationships the world over through social networking sites, individuals have lots of virtual
friends
 in
this
 day and age
instead
 of real
friends
.
That is
 why
people
 spend most of their time on Facebook, Whatsup, and things like to chat with them, but unfortunately, they do not know about their neighbours, who usually come forward and help in any emergency situation.
Hence
, indubitably,
people
 are becoming more unsocial day by day down to state-of-the-art technical equipment. In essence, plausible though, it may seem that
technology
 has many edges, it has made more unsocial and feelingless
people
 due to having more works and virtual
friends
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social interaction
  • connect
  • communicate
  • video conferencing
  • stay in touch
  • online communities
  • forums
  • like-minded individuals
  • global communication
  • collaboration
  • access to information
  • knowledge
  • bridge the gap
  • social isolation
  • detachment
  • face-to-face communication
  • genuine human connection
  • maintain
  • real-life interactions
  • balance
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