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Many people work longer hours, leaving little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages?

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The highly controversial issue today relates to whether the spend long point on the job and less time to pursue hobbies brought more merits or it outweighs the demerits. In
this
 essay, I am going to shed some lights on the advantages and disadvantages of task longer flash.From my perspectives, spending a tiny point on leisure activities has more disadvantages. There are several disadvantages.
Firstly
,It leads to many health-related problems.
For instance
, Sitting long occasion in front of computers leads to back pain and effects on eyes to a greater extent. Apart from
this
, doing continuous industry for a long turn affects productivity. In the 2021 online survey ,It seems that the
one
 who balances the working stage and other activities like games, physical exercise and so on seems to be more productive than
one
 who spent more day on the task. Every coin has two sides. There are some advantages too.
Firstly
, in
this
 era, dearness
one
 of the biggest threat to survival.It compels people to endeavour long hour and earn more money in order to live a luxury life. As a consequence, People consume more time on work
instead
 of leisure activities.
However
,
one
 who earns more money from extra working hours could be spent on the other problems which are associate with is in form of medicine. In conclusion,
although
 consume more time at work leads to earning more money but the problem associated with
this
 cannot be denied.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • work-life balance
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • stress relief
  • productivity
  • economic growth
  • career progression
  • skill enhancement
  • quality time
  • financial security
  • leisure activities
  • physical health
  • personal relationships
  • stress-related illnesses
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