Students at universities often have a choice of places to live. They may choose to live in university dormitories, or they may choose to live in apartments in the community. Compare the advantages of living in university housing with the advantages of living in an apartment in the community. Where would you prefer to live? Give reasons for your preference.

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of choices to live as a student, you can live in
university
dormitories or you can live in the apartments in the community. Both have
there
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own advantages. In my view, I would like to live in
university
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dormitory as it is cheap and all the activities will be
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the
university
campus like gym, sport, etc
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of students are going out from there home country for there higher education in the
university
. Which is very exciting for anyone, as for me when
i
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went out for my higher education (MBBS) to Ukraine, I was very excited and
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bit
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, as it was a totally new place for and totally new language so it was a bit scary ,like how
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am going to adjust there, but
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was excited
also
because now
finally
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am starting my
university
. When
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reached there the one thing which came
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my mind was where
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am going to live should
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live in
dormitory
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a dormitory

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or live in
apartment
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an apartment
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. I chose to live in
dormitory
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as it is more cheap and convenient
to
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me everything which
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needed was there
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the
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campus only like
for example
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have to go gym
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can do it
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can find people from my country and can get socialize with them so will not feel homesick. How living in the
apartment
is costly and
then
will have to search for the
apartment
which will cost me a time and money both, but living in the
apartment
have
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own benefits like: you can get your own space,can do whatever you want, can throw your
cloths
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anywhere no one is there to scold you and if you
are have
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a girlfriend
then
you can get you personal space or you can stay together
also
, you can cook whatever you want, etc. Overall
i
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will
perfer
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to live in the
university
dormitories as it is more
situable
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suitable

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for me. In
conclusion
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both
university
dormitories and apartments have
there
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own advantages.
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