Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair.They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree ? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement ? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
Retirement
age
is given usually to those people who are in old age
regardless of their career, is
unfair, others believe that many Correct pronoun usage
which is
workers
have the rights and will have benefits a
pension Change preposition
of a
in
early Change preposition
at in
age
. I agree to
Change preposition
with
this
notion, most of the workers
like, military personel
and construction Correct your spelling
personnel
workers
need to exerts
much Change the verb
exert
strength
.
To begin
with, soldiers need active
body and be fast in every way. If they gonna retire Correct article usage
an active
in
the Change preposition
at
age
required it is unfair for them. For instance
, a military personel
who serve and gone to many wars wanted to retire early because he was traumatised by his experience and got so many Correct your spelling
personnel
injury
in wars. He has the right to make that choice not to wait until he will become an old man, he Change to a plural noun
injuries
deserve
to receive Change the verb form
deserves
pension
and early Add an article
a pension
the pension
retirement
since he already serve
the country.
Change the verb form
serves
Secondly
, construction workers
needs
Change the verb form
need
strength
in their work
. They are handling and carrying heavy objects as their job
demand. For example
, a man who work
for a long period of time in his career and he getting old he
needs to be rested. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Therefore
, as a worker in job
early Correct article usage
a job
retirement
is applicable since this
work
needs strength
and good condition of body for you to be able to do your job
.
In conclusion, at age
of 65 retirement
is fine if you Change to a plural noun
retirements
work
as librarian officer who just sit and talk to other people, however
, those
Change the determiner
that job
those jobs
job
that needs extra strength
like soldier and construction worker have
the rights to retire in an early Add the particle
to have
age
and receive benefits according to their job
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