Some people think that having a set retirement age (e.g. 65 years) for everybody, regardless of occupation, is unfair.They believe that certain workers deserve to retire and receive a pension at an earlier age. Do you agree or disagree ? Which types of workers do you think should benefit from early retirement ? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Retirement
age
is given usually to those people who are in old
age
regardless of their career,
is
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which is
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unfair, others believe that many
workers
have the rights and will have benefits
a
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of a
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pension
in
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at in
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early
age
. I agree
to
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with
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this
notion, most of the
workers
like, military
personel
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personnel
and construction
workers
need to
exerts
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exert
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much
strength
.
To begin
with, soldiers need
active
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an active
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body and be fast in every way. If they gonna retire
in
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at
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the
age
required it is unfair for them.
For instance
, a military
personel
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personnel
who serve and gone to many wars wanted to retire early because he was traumatised by his experience and got so many
injury
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injuries
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in wars. He has the right to make that choice not to wait until he will become an old man, he
deserve
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deserves
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to receive
pension
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a pension
the pension
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and early
retirement
since he already
serve
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serves
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the country.
Secondly
, construction
workers
needs
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need
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strength
in their
work
. They are handling and carrying heavy objects as their
job
demand.
For example
, a man who
work
for a long period of time in his career and he getting old
he
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apply
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needs to be rested.
Therefore
, as a worker in
job
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a job
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early
retirement
is applicable since
this
work
needs
strength
and good condition of body for you to be able to do your
job
. In conclusion, at
age
of 65
retirement
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retirements
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is fine if you
work
as librarian officer who just sit and talk to other people,
however
,
those
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that job
those jobs
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job
that needs extra
strength
like soldier and construction worker
have
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to have
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the rights to retire in an early
age
and receive benefits according to their
job
.
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