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It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about other cultures of other people. We can learn just as much from books, films, and the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#travel #places #cultures #people #books #films #internet
Knowing
customs
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 and traditions of other
countries
 can
be learn
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 by studying or watching online rather than travelling to
such
places
.
Although
people
 can experience by themselves visiting
to
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another
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another country
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countries
 and can get to know about their cultures, I believe that it could be done by sticking to their
places
 via internet, television and newspapers with no extra charges of flying to distinctive
places
. The reasons for my opinion will be highlighted in the forthcoming paragraphs with relevant illustrations. The major advantage to gain knowledge about other cultures by travelling to that place is
people
 find
sense
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 of
safisfaction
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satisfaction
 as well as experience the interaction with the group of
individual
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the individual
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 from where they can learn various things regarding their traditions.
However
, it is only possible for the
people
 who can spend an inordinate amount of money to
travel
 and get knowledge of
such
 customs by visiting personally.
Travel
 explorers, for examples, need to
travel
 to various
countries
 to know about their living, festivals and other attractions. These individuals are sponsored by the media organizations whereas it is far more difficult for the average
people
 to
travel
 far to get details of their
countries
.
Moreover
, there are several alternatives
such
 as web series, programmes of different ethnic groups where
people
 can learn useful things about new
places
by
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 a single click on their cell phones or televisions. For an instance,
you tube
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youtube
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,
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 is the channel used
world wide
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worldwide
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 to gain knowledge of
farthes
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farthest
further
places
 with
audio visual
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audiovisual
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 media. A person can not only listen to the history or culture of
another
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another place
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places
 but
also
 have a visualization of the traditions and can know the traits of
people
 residing over there. To conclude, despite the fact that
people
 could know better by going themselves to the
places
 where they want to learn, In my perspective, the better idea to have all the details is via
internet
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the internet
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 and other media platforms which are quite convenient and
also
 free of charge.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Authentic experiences
  • Cultural immersion
  • Sensory learning
  • Cost-effective
  • Language barriers
  • Interpersonal interactions
  • Balanced approach
  • Virtual tours
  • Lived experiences
  • Credibility of sources
  • Misconceptions
  • Multicultural competency
  • Stimulate curiosity
  • Digital platforms
  • Stereotypes
  • Environmentally sustainable
  • Hands-on experience
  • Global perspective
  • Biased information
  • Cultural nuances
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