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It is not necessary to travel to other places to learn about other cultures of other people. We can learn just as much from books, films, and the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#travel #places #cultures #people #books #films #internet
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customs
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the customs
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 and traditions of other
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 by studying or watching online rather than travelling to
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places
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people
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 can experience by themselves visiting
to
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another
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another country
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countries
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 and can get to know about their cultures, I believe that it could be done by sticking to their
places
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 via internet, television and newspapers with no extra charges of flying to distinctive
places
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. The reasons for my opinion will be highlighted in the forthcoming paragraphs with relevant illustrations. The major advantage to gain knowledge about other cultures by travelling to that place is
people
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 find
sense
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a sense
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 of
safisfaction
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satisfaction
 as well as experience the interaction with the group of
individual
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the individual
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 from where they can learn various things regarding their traditions.
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, it is only possible for the
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 who can spend an inordinate amount of money to
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 and get knowledge of
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 customs by visiting personally.
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 explorers, for examples, need to
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 to various
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 to know about their living, festivals and other attractions. These individuals are sponsored by the media organizations whereas it is far more difficult for the average
people
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 to
travel
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 far to get details of their
countries
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.
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, there are several alternatives
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 as web series, programmes of different ethnic groups where
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 can learn useful things about new
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by
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 a single click on their cell phones or televisions. For an instance,
you tube
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youtube
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,
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 is the channel used
world wide
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worldwide
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 to gain knowledge of
farthes
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farthest
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places
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 with
audio visual
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audiovisual
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 media. A person can not only listen to the history or culture of
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another place
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places
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 but
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 have a visualization of the traditions and can know the traits of
people
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 residing over there. To conclude, despite the fact that
people
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 could know better by going themselves to the
places
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 where they want to learn, In my perspective, the better idea to have all the details is via
internet
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the internet
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 and other media platforms which are quite convenient and
also
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 free of charge.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Authentic experiences
  • Cultural immersion
  • Sensory learning
  • Cost-effective
  • Language barriers
  • Interpersonal interactions
  • Balanced approach
  • Virtual tours
  • Lived experiences
  • Credibility of sources
  • Misconceptions
  • Multicultural competency
  • Stimulate curiosity
  • Digital platforms
  • Stereotypes
  • Environmentally sustainable
  • Hands-on experience
  • Global perspective
  • Biased information
  • Cultural nuances
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