Some deem that job pleasure is more important than job security. In contrast, others thinks that having a stable job is better than enjoying the job. Discuss both the views and give your own opinion.

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important things. Even though some masses advocate that having a permanent
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is better that joy in the
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have numerous reason to support their perception. The
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life
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in administration,
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of India provide lots of allowance
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their position.
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view
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affirm that
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save more money for their future. Owing to
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have
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salary, they try to save for
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future
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their families and they
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invest through different platform
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of
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high interest
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rate in bank.
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insurance, Fix deposit in post-office and many more. Apart
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survey done by researchers, it
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turned out 70%
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prefer to do
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in their
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group, there is
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population which opines that taking satisfaction form the
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do own choices work, they try to best like coming innovative ideas in their minds. As working in
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environment which directly
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on their mind as well as more work and benefits get in
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time.
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work
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location regarding their occupation along with profession, they always do best and enhance
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growth.
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believe that
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stay healthy
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are working
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, they feel less burden in their
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,
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impact on their health. Not only but
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form of media, it can be ascertained that 62
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prefer to do
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in their lives. To conclude,
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people
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give
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priority
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secure
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than enjoying their
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,
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pleasure does not leave alone. I would say that
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focus
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type
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of
job
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as per their requirement because both are important in our
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.
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