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Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Certain critics are of the view that an individual should accept the distressing situation like ones they have at their workplaces or issues with their finances, while others contradict the same. I concur with the latter statement, and in my opinion,
people
 should always strive to make their life better,
however
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aspects. Opponents support the view of compromising with
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adverse situations because
,
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 masses in certain nations have no proper education facilities at their disposal due to the economic conditions.
Moreover
,
people
 who want to struggle in their life to earn more money and to get a stable job, but because of their low
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 they are not able to survive in the competitive market.
For instance
, in
third
 world countries
such
 as Syria,
people
 face a hard time to satisfy their basic necessities, and the literacy rate is low so in these
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 it is impossible to have a stable financial income.
On the contrary
, there are
people
 including myself are of the
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 that humans should
work
 hard to raise their standard of living, and plan about possible challenges they may face in future. To give my own example, I was employed with a
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 company, but due to toxic
work
culture
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 I was not satisfied with my
work
.
Therefore
, I dedicated a month to find a decent job, and now I am
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 a senior position with a generous salary package. If
people
 do not take chances to improve their situations,
this
 may lead to a monotonous and stressful lifestyle. Taking both
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sides into consideration, it can be concluded that
although
 some
people
 have a thought that individuals’ should adjust
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 whatever situation they have in their life. I personally believe that human beings should always make an effort to improve their financial and
work
 conditions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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