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Write about the following topic: Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

#topic #people #idea #schools #person #parent #skills
I agree with the given statement . Every young person
need
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a
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knowledge
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how to be a good
parent
 . According to my point of
view
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parent
 play a pivotal role in
children
's
life
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 to help them abut the difference between good and bad manners. If
parent
have
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a knowledge
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knowledge
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 about that they are good to
be explain
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 the stuff to
children
's . In
this
 talk, I explain the points with some instance
about
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 the
skills
 which are important to us. The
first
 and foremost point is that families need to be educated and have
a
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good
skills
 to improve their
children
 future .
For instance
 , Mother and father both are important to teach their
children
 about the
the
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positive thoughts. Not only mother is a
parent
 to
children
 who care about the food , education and health . Because some of the people
thinks
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 that
mother
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the mother
a mother
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 is only one to take care
about
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 all activities of
children
 and Father go outside to work and get money to complete the demands of the
children
. so
bothof
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both of
both
 the
parent
need
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 to be
a
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good and
postive
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positive
skills
 to improve their
children
 future.
Furthermore
 , the government need
tobe
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 open some schools for uneducated families by which they get some lessons to improve
there
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their
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skills
.
Skills
 are important for all to
became
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a
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good human .
Skills
 like how we get positive , how we fight with problems and
etcetra
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etcetera
 . If
parent
have
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 good
skills
 to tackle
with
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apply
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the problems in
a
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life
 . They are good to be a perfect
parent
 . In conclusion,
i
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 just wanna say that
everthing
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everything
 is important in our
life
 like
eduction
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education
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 ,
postivity
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positivity
 to became a good person in
life
 and
also
 make our
children
 perfect according to the new systems .
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