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Some people think that social networking sites have a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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internet technology popularity, social networking sites have a huge impact on both individuals and society. Some
people
 believe that the effect of cyber social sites is negative. I strongly agree with
this
 opinion.
To begin
 with, the internet system is cost-effective and convenient for individuals.
This
 means that all
kinds
 of human behaviours have been moving from the real world to a virtual world, which can promote
people
 to finish many works efficiently, make friends widely, and discuss all
kinds
 of topics whenever and wherever possible.
However
,
people
 are inevitable to lose many healthy habits,
such
 as, the global meeting leads many
people
 who have to work at night to suffer from a long time sitting down a side of the desk talking with colleagues or customers from
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 city across the world.
This
 kind of sedentary lifestyles definitely impacts
people
’s health negatively, which cause many serious illnesses to workers
such
 as heart disease or obesity.
Additionally
, the trait of
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 internet social network is irreversible to promote many societies running efficiently, while it absolutely
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 attention to some
people
 commit all
kinds
 of
cyber crimes
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. Through building network chat rooms, pasting pornographies, spreading
rumors
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, making fake news, so that they can push drugs, illegally gamble, overhaul some crucial verdicts like a result of national voting. Those activities deeply deteriorate our societies, which make the mechanism of society not longer high quality. To summaries, technological progress has been overwhelming all
kinds
 of conventional customs, beliefs, norms and values. I hold a conservative opinion and pessimistically think that
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 side of social network sites must to change
orientation
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 of our living to twilight.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social isolation
  • virtual interactions
  • mental health
  • feelings of inadequacy
  • anxiety
  • depression
  • misinformation
  • destabilize
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • productivity
  • foster connections
  • educational content
  • social activism
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