Some believe that is the responsibility of people to take care of the environment. Other says if is the government that should take care of the environment. Discussing both the view and give your opinion.

In the current day world where
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climate change is affecting for the worse, it has become essential for everyone to contribute in
anyway
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possible they can to stop
this
hazardous act from happening time and again.
Thus
my essay going forward
Firstly
, will talk
why
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is it necessary for individuals to take up responsibility? and
Secondly
, how authorities can implement numerous rules which one should follow.
To begin
with, people need to take care of their surroundings in order to lead a healthy life and
moreover
, it has become
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necessity over
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time. In recent times, there is a massive increase seen in heart and lung due increase seen in Air pollution which has impacted the mortality rate. Due to
rise
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the rise
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in water
pollution
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there is a spike seen in cases of Cholera, Malaria and Jaundice. Keeping territory clean not only affects your health in
physcial
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physical
form but
also
it
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keeps you fresh mentally.
For example
,
United
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states
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of America and India both saw
rise
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a rise
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in deaths of
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citizens due to Heart Attach and Malaria in
year
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2019.
On the contrary
,
Goverments
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Government
Governments
needs to introduce various norms and
regulatation
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regulations
regulation
which needs to be followed or citizens need to compensate with
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fine. They need to regulate sectors like Heavy industries and Auto manufactures of their product which releases the
poisonus
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poisonous
gases which
affects
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the environment and human health. Administrations can introduce various schemes and awards for the person or the bodies who participate in improving environmental conditions.
For example
, Mithbai college in Bombay was awarded for the Tree Plantation
initatives
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initiatives
and students who took part
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the same were granted scholarships for their
further
studies. To conclude, In my honest opinion whatever mankind wants has to start at home
first
, officials can lay down the rules and norms but it is humankind who need to follow them.
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