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Some people prefer to live in a house, while others feel that there are more advantages to living in an apartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

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Some people believe that living in their own
house
 has more pros than renting one. I personally believe that
owing
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 a
house
 has more cons compared with living in an apartment. The reasons will be discussed in
this
 essay. One of the reasons why some people purchase their
house
 is that renting a
house
 requires them to pay more money in a long. Buying a
house
 and staying in the place,
however
, is sometimes risky because you may have to
move
 because of your work. There are
also
 cases that you are forced to
move
 because you cannot get along with
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. In those cases, it costs you remarkably a lot of money. You have to consider the case that you have no choices other than moving to another city.
Furthermore
, the size of the
house
 you wish
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 differ depends on your situation. If you have children,
for example
, you may need a big
house
 to raise your kids. After kids
move
 due to their marriage or commuting schools, you do not have any reasons to live in
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such
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house
. Rather, it bothers to clean the big
house
 that
have
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 a number of rooms nobody uses every day. If you feel
in
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this
 way, you should stay in your
house
.
Therefore
,
although
 it seems that living in your own
house
 has advantages
in
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 some degree, there are more disadvantages that you should consider. Having choices to
move
 whenever you desire to gives you a sense of freedom. Though living in a renting
house
 may cost more in a long run, I would like to emphasize that it worth paying
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.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • privacy
  • outdoor activities
  • gardening
  • customization options
  • renovate
  • structural changes
  • investments
  • appreciation/depreciation
  • maintenance costs
  • utility costs
  • security features
  • gated entries
  • surveillance systems
  • shared amenities
  • community centers
  • suburban
  • rural areas
  • commutes
  • urban centers
  • public transport
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