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Some people believe that all the company decisions should be taken by the managers whereas others think it is better to include employees while making decisions. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #company #decisions #managers #employees
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crutial
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crucial
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 decisions of a firm are always taken by the management and a lion's share of the people completely agrees with it.
However
, others contend that
employees
 participation ought to be mandatory while taking any company decisions. In
this
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both sides and analyze, how it is advantageous if, decision making is left for the upper management only.
Although
, there are many benefits of including
employees
 while making strategies of a firm,
for instance
, an employee suggested
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 the neck size of the toothpaste, so that more can be consumed by the consumers while using it. With more
consumption
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 it resulted in
huge
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 rise in sale for the same toothpaste.
Hence
, a constructive idea can actually The reason why managers of a company take significant decisions because they usually have a vast knowledge and adequate experience of their profile. They know how a firm operates and are aware of the fact that any major change can have an impact on its
employees
 and its stakeholders. They know the strength and weaknesses of their
employees
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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