Some people argue that the government should give every unemployed person a mobile phone and should make sure they have access to the Internet. They believe this is the best way of using public money to reduce the problem of unemployment. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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In today’s heavy world, the number of not employed
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is ever increasing dramatically. Even
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well-developed countries are bothering with
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problem. It is agreed that
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have to give every unemployed person a smartphone and
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is the best decision of using citizen’s finance to decrease the issue of joblessness. Analyzing both the advantages
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as bureaucrat’s waste
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as well as giving an opportunity for
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generation
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going to prove my agreement.
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, a person who will never well-fed to money like some bureaucrats and officials, at no time will think about public treasure.
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is evidenced by some media’s statistics. In Kazakhstan at less about 30-20 million dollars steals by some officials and they abscond easily by their money’s power.
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in
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storage apropos of nothing. It must be concluded that in spite of keeping the money emptily, our country
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to support unemployed
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things.
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, our future respectively to the young generation’s conditions. If I take an example, time by time elder
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’s positions will completely replace our young gen.
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, it will be a smart person who is at the moment unemployed or unemployed
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’s kid.
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instance clearly shows that government should pay attention to all
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evenly.
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, it must be summarized that if our state makes for unemployed
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good deed, it will be a big benefit to both sides. After analyzing the above, it can be concluded that
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will see only usefulness if they pay attention to unemployment
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.
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it is clear that
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needs genius
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. I hope that they will provide workless
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with needful things.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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