Some believe that more action should be taken to prevent crime, while others feel that crime is being tackled effectively now. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

There is no doubt that criminal activities
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geared exceedingly globally.
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, while some believe that these
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are handled productively than before, I would agree with those who argue that strict actions are still required to control
crime
. To commence with
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is important to consider the
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involvement
of numerous technological advances in curtailing
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rate.
This
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because
,the observation and detection of a
crime
under CCTV surveillance
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actively enhanced the power of police to catch the criminal. To cite an example, if a
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thief
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a money bank with an intention of conducting a robbery might get caught leading him directly towards imprisonment due to the presence of
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in that
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premises
.
Also
, in many facilities nowadays, there are siren and
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burglar
alarm systems installed to prevent the
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occurrence
of
crime
and for safety reasons.
Thus
, now illegal acts are tackled in a more effective manner which was not the case earlier.
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, I
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believe
that the enforcement of
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strict punishment is the only way to minimise
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major crimes
such
as murder or acid attacks. The reason for
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is that unwitnessed or
crime
are considered as
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offence which strengthens the criminal's will to repeat the action
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again
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