Some people think that the best way to reduce the time spent in travelling to work is to replace parks and gardens close to the city center with apartment buildings for commuters, but others disagree. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Nowadays, an increasing number of
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are concerned about spending too much
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on transportation to
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, some even argue that it`s best to remove the public
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for apartments
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to solve
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issue. My view is that
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kind of replacement will do zero good on
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who spend
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long time travel
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time
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travel to
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. Let`s assume there were numeric apartments replaced by
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and gardens set up in the city
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already
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to start
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argument. These houses must be ridiculously expensive.
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who normally live in a suburb might still not able to afford it. If ideally the apartment is managed by the government, authorities tend to enact a strict standard to recruit candidates for government-controlled houses. There must be a long waiting list ahead,
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most of the commuters will still need to travel for a long distance.
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, shanghai issued a low-rent apartment policy in 2012. The average rent for the same is at least 20% lower than the market. Still, there are
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who waited from 2012 till now and still have no clue about the apartment.
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is not to say that live nearby do not have
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advantages. Stay close to the place you
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will save precious
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and energy that will help
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be productive during
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.
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, since
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on the way is saved,
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can balance better on life and
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that will be a benefit their mental health.
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, one of my colleagues spends nearly 6 hours on daily transportation. It`s hard for him to focus on his task
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got himself fired; he was frustrated after. For him, I do believe build a life near the company will be helpful, but I still not see the necessity of tear the
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apart for it. In sum, replace the
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with accommodations will not help thereby it`s not necessary.
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, if we truly wish to resolve the issue may be the government could support expanding
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for the city or announce a statement for
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to
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from home. By doing so we can make sure that
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could survive without suffering from exhausted travelling.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • commuters
  • urban areas
  • housing availability
  • alleviating housing crises
  • public transport
  • traffic congestion
  • environmental health
  • biodiversity
  • recreational
  • mental health benefits
  • urban heat islands
  • green lungs
  • community interaction
  • cohesion
  • innovative urban planning
  • multi-use buildings
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