Nowadays many people travel to foreign countries for pleasure. Some believe this travel has negative impact on the countries travelled to. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Many
poeple
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people
have
negative
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mindset towards international
tourism
. According to them, it has
bad
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impact on the
countries
where they travelled to. I do not
hassitate
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hesitate
to oppose
this
idea because global
tourism
brings many benefits to the
countries
.
Firstly
, the most crucial benefit of international travel is, it brings foreign currency
in
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the
country
. most of the people in tribunal area where foreign people used to travel, depends on tourists only, they get employment during
season
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the season
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:
for example
, Public of Kutch in India survive on
tourism
only, During Ranotsav they try to earn as much as possible.
Besides
, Because of the
tourism
the
haritage
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heritage
and legacy of the
country
can be highly maintained as so many visitors come
there
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here
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to visit it. From the survey, it has seen that
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approximately 15% of the
countries
are depend
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on global
tourism
only.
In addition
, just imagine the world without
tourism
, the exchange of culture, food and
life style
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lifestyle
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will only be possible
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if
country
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the country
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allows
foreign
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public to visit.
For example
, the human being of Europe visit any place of India, they always find their food for the health
conciousness
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consciousness
;
As a result
, the local people have to bring the food liked by the europian travellers. Global
tourism
does not only beneficial for
public
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and the
country
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But
also
helpful to industries to make their
market wide
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, these days some industries only provide services by considering tourists. In conclusion, global travelling may have
negative
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a negative
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impact on the
countries
while I strongly believe that
tourism
brings lots of benefits to natives,
country
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the country
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as well as the companies, even we can not imagine the world without
tourism
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Cultural exchanges
  • Global connections
  • Tourism boosts
  • Local economy
  • Over-tourism
  • Environmental degradation
  • Landmarks
  • Commodification of culture
  • Authentic cultural expressions
  • Cultural homogenization
  • Tourism infrastructure
  • Public services
  • Disrespect local customs
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