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It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion? What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behavior two children?

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 point, pupils should be
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 for their actions against the good morals and ethics as they have the responsibility to be a sound younger citizen since from the very beginning of their childhood age, parents and teachers are need to absorb as much as knowledge as they can so that they can the kids raise with good conduct, behaviour, and social responsibilities from the infantry stage itself. Now it
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 the thing of what kind of punishments to be imposed and implemented to kids which could turn them positively without noticing that they are undergoing through any
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 key to preach them the wisdom of stream where he/she is lacking and should try to enhance and enrich their existing knowledge to
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 and, It seems to me demonstrating the instances of
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 children with the ample cool and good humanism would
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 is parents should supports and cooperate with the teacher and the preachers eventually they can do justice to their role with stipulated guidelines and help to mould the future makers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Moral compass
  • Perceptions
  • Discipline
  • Reinforcement
  • Controversies
  • Verbal reprimands
  • Physical discipline
  • Psychological impact
  • Mental well-being
  • Constructive tasks
  • Timeouts
  • Loss of privileges
  • Behavioral modification
  • Consequences
  • Accountability
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