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BIG SALARY IS MUCH MORE IMPORTANT THAN JOB SATISFACTION. DO YOU AGREE OR DISAGREE?

#salary #job #satisfaction
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Some
people
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 think that big wages are quiet essential than
job
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satisfaction
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 in today's world. In my opinion, I completely agree with the statement, and
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 is because a big salary comes with a feeling of happiness that comes with seeing good
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, unlike when you are poorly paid. I shall explain the same
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, Taking up jobs or businesses that would earn them more
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 rather than jobs that would give them
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.
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 is because earning big wages fortnightly or monthly would make them happier and allow them to enjoy their lives than those looking for
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 contentment. Massive earnings enable
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 to travel around the world and even develop themselves professionally.
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,
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 who earn a lot of
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 always going on vacations to the country of their choice.
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, when
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's earnings are more, it boosts their confidence and earns them a financial status.
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 will help them invest in shares and stock like every other person who has significant earnings. They can eat in any restaurant of their choice and meet with
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 who
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 earn a lot of
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 like them which is not the case for those happy with
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satisfaction
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.
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, working at Tesla as a manager, you would like to eat out at the choicest restaurant. In conclusion, I strongly agree that earning big wages is much more important than
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satisfaction
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 in our society today because they can lead a luxurious happy life and have
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society.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • remuneration
  • financial security
  • motivation
  • luxuries
  • material possessions
  • fulfillment
  • work-life balance
  • stress levels
  • mental well-being
  • job security
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