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Increasing the price of patrol is the best way to solve the growing traffic and pollution problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement? What other measures do you think might be effective.

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Nowadays ,increasing pollution is a major concern and some individuals suggest that for resolving the issues of traffic and pollution, rising
in
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the fuel
price
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 will prove beneficial.
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, I completely disaccord with the solution as there are many other ways to control environmental pollution and traffic congestion. Let's discuss with
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relevant
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hike
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 in the
patrol
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petrol
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price
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 will lead to
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 economic recession in the country.
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,
country's
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the country's
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 economy will suffer from
shortage
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a shortage
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 of flow of money in the market
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from
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the
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less spending by citizens because of inflation.
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, it will badly
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 the nation's image in the international community.
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global
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the global
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 organisation will put pressure on the government to take necessary measures in order to tackle the problem of
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 in
patrol
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petrol
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price
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.
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rise
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 in fuel
price
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 will have
severe
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 effect on the
middle class
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 people as
this
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 will put more pressure on their pocket.
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, they are not able to commute daily for work and studies purposes. To cite an example,
hike
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 in fuel
price
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 will
also
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leads
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 to
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a rise
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rise
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 in
ticket
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the ticket
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price
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 of public transport. Overall, citizens are the
one
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ones
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 who
suffer
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 more from the burden of
increase
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an increase
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 in
price
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.
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,
this
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 will broaden the gap between the rich and the poor. To conclude,
although
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hike
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a hike
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 in
patrol
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petrol
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 prices is a constructive idea ,
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 other measures
such
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introduction
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the introduction
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 of electronic vehicles and promotion of public transport may bring a change.
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, awareness programs should be encouraged
among
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 citizens.
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