Some people believe that a person's culture is defined by their country of origin, while others believe that has only a minor influence. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

These days, there is an ongoing debate between
people
about the
culture
of the person influenced by the county of origin. While other
people
claim that it does not have
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impact
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origin
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of
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, as per my view both the arguments have validity and I shall explain my point of view by analysing both sides of the argument. The main reason which impacts
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human mostly is the place where they were born and raised. The lifestyle is mostly biased by the native
culture
for example
food, the spices are the important ingredient of Indian cuisine. It should
also
be taken into account that traditional music, folk dance are mostly enjoyed by the
people
, which come from their country of origin. On the other side, we should consider the effect of Globalisation. Many
people
travel around the world for
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, job or for the interest which
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exposure to different cultures. In
this
situation, humans look forward and adapt to the surroundings of the place which bring a change in the
behavior
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or way of life,
for
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people
who have migrated to other countries
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like the music or clothing of that region. While there are strong arguments on both sides of the case, my personal opinion is that
people
change their way of living as per the place and start adapting to a new
culture
. I would strongly say that everyone has the liberty to enjoy life as they wish and there is no much impact
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where they came from. All together humans are social animals and have all rights to follow any
culture
which suits
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