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Completing university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. on the other hand other people think that getting experiences and developing soft skills is more important . Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

#university #education #job #hand #people #experiences #skills
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While some people are in
favor
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 of higher
education
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 because it helps
job
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 hunting, others argue that real-life
experiences
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 are more important for the young. Both sides have good reasons but I personally incline to support the latter. I will analyze the advantages of both options and give my reasons why
experiences
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 are more plausible for the young. Admittedly,
university
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education
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 can develop
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young in various ways.
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 with, it allows youngsters to concentrate on
one
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specilisation
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specialisation
specialization
. During a period of three or four years, students will learn in-depth about
one
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 subject and develop
a
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particular expertise.
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,
one
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 can become a software engineer after pursuing a major
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 computer science.
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,
university
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 diplomas will be helpful in the
labor
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 market. Nowadays, it is ubiquitous for employers to ask for a college
education
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 regardless of the
job
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 type.
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,
graduate
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the graduate
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 certificate will be definitely helpful in the process of
job
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 hunting.
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, I believe that professional
experiences
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 are far more crucial and beneficial to the young. While
university
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 students focus only on academics and theories, young professionals will learn fast at a real
job
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 and acquire a lot of practical soft
skills
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 that they could not get from schooling. As an example, we will develop teamwork
skills
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 and leadership while collaborating with coworkers. These
skills
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be benefit
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 the individual for a lifetime.
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, there are
also
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 financial benefits. Youngsters will be compensated as soon as they enter the workforce.
This
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 will allow them to become independent and improve their standards of life without worrying about the loans that they might
otherwise
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 take if they chose to go to
university
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. In conclusion,
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university
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education
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 is useful if
one
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 wants to learn hard
skills
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 and become
expert
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 in
one
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 area. But it will be more practical for most of us to get more real-world
experiences
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, acquire more useful soft
skills
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 and to earn our lives earlier. For
this
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 reason, I encourage young people to consider entering the
job
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 market as early as they can.
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