Some people say that the best way to improve public health is by increasing the number of sports facilities. Others, however, say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measures are required.

The chart illustrates the average number of
families
that have owned and rented accommodations and
this
survey is done in England and Wales between 1928 and 2011. Overall, in 1918 , most of the
families
stayed in rented
houses
and in that same
year
least of them have self-owned accommodation. Meanwhile , in 1971, households have an equal amount of owned and rented
houses
.
Firstly
, in 1918, approximately 77 per cent of the households stayed in rented
houses
which was greater than the households who resided in their own dwellings and that was around 22 per cent.
Secondly
, in the
year
1971, 50 per cent of the
families
resided in owned and rented dwellings and they were equal in number.
Moreover
, the lowest number of rented
houses
were calculated in the
year
2001 and the value was around 31
precent
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per cent
.
In addition
to that, there was
difference
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between the
families
who stayed on rent in the
year
1981 and 2001.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • public health
  • sports facilities
  • physical activity
  • exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • heart disease
  • obesity
  • inclusivity
  • participation
  • safe environment
  • social interaction
  • community engagement
  • comprehensive approach
  • health education programs
  • environmental factors
  • healthcare infrastructure
  • quality healthcare services
  • public health initiatives
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