Some people believe school children should help to create rules their schools. Others say teacher alone should decide what the rules are. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

In
this
modern era,
education
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system has been enhanced significantly compared to
past
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the past
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and
also
the requirements of discipline and
rules
should
be require
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to mould the
student
behaviour
accordingly
.
Although
some say it is the responsibility of
teachers
while others think pupils can help to develop these
rules
. In the upcoming essay, I will discuss both views and form my opinion. On the one hand, it is a prime onus
of
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the teacher to make appropriate
rules
for students to shape
school
culture.
For instance
, how the
school
atmosphere will look if all the students put on various kinds of clothes all
the
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days? Absolutely not good because how children will be identified? If it is persisted for
long
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time, there will be no any respect
to
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teachers
because gradually fear will diminish and no
any
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student
will
listen
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teachers
resultantly.
On the other hand
,
obviously
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,obviously
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student
can help to make
rules
. If there is
partnership
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a partnership
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of the
student
to
crate
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create
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rules
, they may be obeying the
rules
but
if
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must be
in
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within
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limit.
Also
,
teachers
have enough maturity by their experience for how to cope with
different
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a different
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type of
student
mentality and what
rules
should
to
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require to instil good manners in each
student
.
For instance
, they can catch the
student
easily where he spoke
lie
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.
Finally
, to sum
up
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to crate proper
school
rules
is an accountability of the teacher to develop
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well-bred
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well bred
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society by implanting good morals in each
student
. Younger
school
children are never mature enough to create
rules
in their
school
except
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some exceptions.
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