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Some people think its better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe its good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Most
people
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 argue that always make
friends
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 who match
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your mindset. While
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 others think that select the
friends
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 who contradict
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their
opinions
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. In my view,
every one
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 has
a unique qualities
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a unique quality
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 but I prefer to make a
friend
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 who always
agree
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 with your
thoughts
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.
This
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 can be seen that the
people
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 who always agree with your
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 will be
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 found
close
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friends
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.
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 most
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people
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the people
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 love to
share
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 their
feelings
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 with those
friends
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 who have the same opinion.
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 will create a strong bond between both
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.
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, it will help
people
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 in difficult times and they feel more comfortable to
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 their problems with their
friends
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 and they hope that they will get
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 response from them
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, they find their emotional satisfaction from their guidance. one of the research shows that the
friends
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same
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 believes found long-lasting relationship with each other and it is difficult for them to forget each other.
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,
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 a good idea to make
friends
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 who contradict
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your
opinions
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 because when your
friend
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disagree
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disagrees
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 with your
thoughts
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 he will
share
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 his own
prospective
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perspective
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 and it will help
people
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 to know that he is right
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, it will
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lead
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 to
broad
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a broad
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 vision and enhance your knowledge. But sometimes it may result in
seperation
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separation
 because when
arguements
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arguments
 start between two
people
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 and everyone is supporting their point of view it may sometimes convert into fights and will never see each other. In my opinion, I would say that
friends
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same
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feelings
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 and
thoughts
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 are found the best
friends
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 forever
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, they will enjoy together and
share
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 their
feelings
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 without hesitating
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 because they feel secure
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, blindly trust each other and know that he will never
diclose
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disclose
 his personal life to
stranger
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a stranger
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.
In
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the
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a
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 result, they are having a strong bond
between
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with
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 each other and
thses
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these
 kind of friendships will found
long -lasting
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. To sum up, I believe that
people
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 should prefer
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friends
a friend
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friends
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same
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opinions
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 if they want to make real
friends
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to
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 whom they trust and feel
confortable
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comfortable
 to
share
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 their
feelings
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. some
people
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 who have different
opinions
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 are mostly found unhappy with each other. Take an example if one person
plan
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plans
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 a trip
to
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somewhere and wants that he would like to go there and
finally
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 when he
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 with his
friend
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 about
trip
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the trip
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 plan and in response he got
refusal
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a refusal
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 from his
friend
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 his heart will
broke
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 and he never
share
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 his
feelings
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 again with
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friend
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a friend
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 again.
These kind
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 of friendships do not take
long
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 time to finish because
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 its a human psychology that if he did not get what he want
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create more understanding and it
convert
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 into
a
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unforgetable
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unforgettable
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bond
  • support
  • unconditional love
  • shared values
  • mutual understanding
  • trust
  • emotional well-being
  • interdependence
  • societal norms
  • companionship
  • loyalty
  • advice
  • experiences
  • mentorship
  • trustworthy
  • reliable
  • reliable
  • cherish
  • strengthen
  • deepen
  • attach importance to
  • prioritize
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