Many elderly people are no longer looked after by their families but are put in care homes or nursing homes. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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In recent years, most
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young
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leaving their parents and send them separate from themselves. Many old
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have sent to
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care
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facilities by their family
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of looking over them
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myself
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essay will highlight both the benefits and drawbacks that result from
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scheme of keeping old
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in special
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homes
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with the positives, a crucial advantage is that
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population has treated well in terms of medical
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and nutrition. Nursing institutions hire professional nurses who provide
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proper
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medication and their meals on time which is really helpful in staying healthy.
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helps old
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to reduce their illness and pain.
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, if they are living in families, some
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don't
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much about providing
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good nutrition. They serve them whatever they eat themselves
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as Pizza, Burger or other junk food.
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the healthy environment,
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departments
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prevent them from harmful diseases.
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is how they take instant actions in case of emergency because nurses always wandering around them and they detect easily what is going on with
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health
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. In
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way, they never left behind with any treatment they need urgently.
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,
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the above
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points consider that old pupil get the best and healthy life in
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homes
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, separate
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accomodations
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accommodations
accommodation
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also
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bring some bad results. The most important one is that they feel alone and homesickness. Due to staying away from their families for
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time,
grand parents
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grandparents
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feels
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lack
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a lack
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of love and
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togetherness
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they suppose to get by living in their
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. In hospital residencies, they cannot share their thoughts or feelings with anyone there because sometimes they feel insecure to share
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with strangers.
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them
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feeling
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a feeling
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of loneliness and away from home.
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to it, depression is
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another problem
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that arise
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from living away from families.
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, in Canada, due to
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schedule of
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they put their parents in
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facilites
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facilities
and can not make often visits.
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, elderly humans start feeling that they are not loved anymore and grow negative thoughts in their mind. One day, these thoughts
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a compound as a form of depression and compel them to kill themselves as they feel that they have no meaning left to live.
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situation
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brings some unbearable diseases i.e., mental disorders, brain
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and many more.
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lines tells that sending our grandparents
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to
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heath
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health
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insitutions
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institutions
is not a good thing. To conclude, no doubt putting old individuals in
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care
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homes
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has
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of advantages as they gove proper nutrition and prevent them
form
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diseases.
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, it has some demerits because they feel they are separated from their loving world and
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creates some mental problems in their mind
whch
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which
brings harmful results.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Professional care
  • Medical attention
  • Trained staff
  • Social interaction
  • Combat loneliness
  • Safety and security
  • Relief for families
  • Loss of autonomy
  • Emotional impact
  • Cost
  • Financial strain
  • Quality of care
  • Neglect and abuse
  • Detachment from family
  • Mental wellbeing
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