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Some people feel that the effects of advertising are positive for individuals and businesses, while others think they are negative. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion.

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recent times, advertisement and promotions influence a lot among
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humanity.
Buisnessmen
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Businessmen
Businesses
 frequently use it as a platform for promoting their goods and add importance to
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them
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.
This
 can help the individuals to know more about them and use
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 wisely .But there are fake offerings
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deviates
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 people from having the right one.In my opinion, the advertisements are advantageous for the owners of the
brand
 but if the promises on
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 fake it can negatively impact the common men.
First
 and foremost, the proliferation of advertisements for an item strengthens the value of that
brand
 that they want to sell.
This
 is done by spending a large amount of money on advertising companies. They promote the product in a more creative and informative way in which it grabs more people's attention. As a consequence, they will buy it in the belief that it would supply the qualities that are promised.
This
 results in the acceleration of the profit for the
brand
' products and its business.
On the contrary
, the advertisements might mislead the public.
This
 is due to the fact that there were incidents in which humans purchase products based on the promises and facts that the companies are offering, and they remain fake after their usage. They are frequently misled by not choosing the right quality stuff due to fake publicity. Usually,
this
 happens due to the fact that actors or prominent members of the society act on
such
 ad-films making the world around to believe that the offerings and promises are true. To sum up ,the
tradeperson
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tradesperson
 has to promote their items in a truthful and ethical way .In
such
 a way people can experience
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right quality products according to their expectations.
This
 can
also
 help in accelerating their sales and profit and to maintain a good
brand
 value.
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