Government spend a lot of money on public celebrations such as national holidays and public festivals. Some people say that government spend too much on this and that they should use this money on other useful things. Do you agree or disagree ?

Celebrations
which is funded by
government
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are an essential component of lives. It is believed that these are beneficial
for
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to
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pursue
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pursuing
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our culture and learn our history.
However
, it can not be denied that
instead
of funding these
celebrations
government
can invest
technological
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in technological
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developments
, education facilities. As for me ,
instead
of allocating
money
for
celebrations
,investing
education
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in education
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system
enhance
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enhances
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the quality of
life
and technological
developments
aid
countries
to
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in
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being developed in every field . I would like
to begin
with
explain
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explaining
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why
government
allocate fund for technological
developments
rather than
celebrations
.It can not be denied that many
countries
strive for excellence and compete with them and showing breakthroughs in technology
is not boost
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is not boosting
is not boosted
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their economy but
also
enhance the quality of
people
’s
life
. It is obvious that the aforementioned improvements which should be allocated more
money
by
government
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the government
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offer us a decent
life
rather than funding
celebrations
.
For instance
, In Japan , it is evident that because of attaching importance of technological investments many
people
pursue
welfare
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life
because thanks to good economic conditions many abundant opportunities
are emerged
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like low taxes and facilities. It is worthwhile to note that,
transportation
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the transportation
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system is improved by technology . To exemplify, many
people
can see where the vehicles will be and the time and
also
they can see traffic congestion in their mobile devices. These
are prevent
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congestion and it makes
people
life
easier.
Therefore
, investing technology should be implemented by
government
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the government
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because of pursing
welfare
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life
. When it comes to the education facilities, rather than allocating
money
for
celebrations
nationalities should attach importance to these areas. I would like to explain how
countries
alleviate problems in
training
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area. Public schools and universities can be increased and scholarship which scholarships can only be provided to successful children. In
this
way, many students strive to gain
scholarship
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and it brings them success.
In addition
to
this
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some children have to drop off their training
life
because of supporting their family.
National
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budget can be allocated for the aforementioned poor
people
and some fees can be decreased for them.
Therefore
, the balance of going to school between all of
children
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the children
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who are poor or rich can not be disturbed. To sum up , It makes no sense to allocate
money
for
celebrations
, because
instead
, following technological
developments
and improving educational opportunities improves the economy of
countries
and the quality of
people
's lives. Territories should attach importance to these areas.
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