Government spend a lot of money on public celebrations such as national holidays and public festivals. Some people say that government spend too much on this and that they should use this money on other useful things. Do you agree or disagree ?
Celebrations
which is funded by government
are an essential component of lives. It is believed that these are beneficial Add an article
the government
for
Verify preposition usage
to
pursue
our culture and learn our history. Change the verb form
pursuing
However
, it can not be denied that instead
of funding these celebrations
government
can invest technological
Change preposition
in technological
developments
, education facilities. As for me , instead
of allocating money
for celebrations
,investing education
system Change preposition
in education
enhance
the quality of Change the verb form
enhances
life
and technological developments
aid countries
to
being developed in every field .
I would like Verify preposition usage
from
in
to begin
with explain
why Change the verb form
explaining
government
allocate fund for technological developments
rather than celebrations
.It can not be denied that many countries
strive for excellence and compete with them and showing breakthroughs in technology is not boost
their economy but Change the verb form
is not boosting
is not boosted
also
enhance the quality of people
’s life
. It is obvious that the aforementioned improvements which should be allocated more money
by government
offer us a decent Add an article
the government
life
rather than funding celebrations
. For instance
, In Japan , it is evident that because of attaching importance of technological investments many people
pursue welfare
Correct article usage
a welfare
life
because thanks to good economic conditions many abundant opportunities are emerged
like low taxes and facilities. It is worthwhile to note that, Change to the active voice
emerge
have emerged
transportation
system is improved by technology . To exemplify, many Add an article
the transportation
people
can see where the vehicles will be and the time and also
they can see traffic congestion in their mobile devices. These are prevent
congestion and it makes Change the verb form
prevent
people
life
easier. Therefore
, investing technology should be implemented by government
because of pursing Add an article
the government
welfare
Correct article usage
a welfare
life
.
When it comes to the education facilities, rather than allocating money
for celebrations
nationalities should attach importance to these areas. I would like to explain how countries
alleviate problems in training
area. Public schools and universities can be increased and scholarship which scholarships can only be provided to successful children. In Add an article
the training
this
way, many students strive to gain scholarship
and it brings them success. Add an article
a scholarship
In addition
to this
some children have to drop off their training Add a comma
,this
life
because of supporting their family. National
budget can be allocated for the aforementioned poor Correct article usage
The national
people
and some fees can be decreased for them. Therefore
, the balance of going to school between all of children
who are poor or rich can not be disturbed.
To sum up , It makes no sense to allocate Add an article
the children
money
for celebrations
, because instead
, following technological developments
and improving educational opportunities improves the economy of countries
and the quality of people
's lives. Territories should attach importance to these areas.Submitted by nilaycarsibasi on
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