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Living in a country where you gave to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant. 10.57

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These pie charts depict information about the online expenditures revenue for the marketing area in New Zealand between the
year
 2003 and 2013. From the graph, it is clear that books and film/music experienced a considerable rise in their numbers, while travel and clothes showed a decline over the years. Books started at 19 % in 2003.
This
 climbed up by 3% , which became nearly a quarter piece of the chart in 2013. In regards to film/books, approximately 21% accounted for in the
year
 2003 to
this
 section.
However
, there was a significant increase in
this
 category with a growth of merely 12 %.
Therefore
, it became the largest segment in the final
year
. In 2003, travel accounted for most in
this
year
, with a percentage of 36%.
Then
 it plunged with 7% down to a number of 29. There was a gradual drop in the numbers of clothes in 2013.
First
, it started with 24% and plummet to 16% in the
last
year
.
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