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The line graph compares the differences in three regions in terms of crime in Newport city centre between the year 2003 and 2012. Overall, car theft and robbery experienced some fluctuation in the time period.
However
, burglary showed a steady fall over time. As the graph shows, the car theft figure started at approximately 2800 in 2003, which remained stable till 2005.
This
 followed by a rapid drop to just over 2000
incidents
 in 2006. From here, it went up steadily by crossing burglary numbers and reached 2200.
Then
, there was a gradual increase and reached a peak of around 2500 in 2010.
Finally
, it increased moderately to around 2700. Regarding the robbery rate, in 2003 they had almost 600
incidents
, which was the lowest during that year.
Then
 it rose steadily to about 800 in 2008 but
this
 number fell to 500 in 2008.
then
 , the
incidents
 showed an upward trend to 700 before witnessing a small dip to 600.
By contrast
, burglary started at less than 3500 in 2003.
This
 rapidly went up to 3800 in 2004. From here, it gradually plunged to a low point of just over 1000.
Moreover
, the
incidents
 showed a rise to around 1500 in 2009. The numbers stayed steady till the end of the period.
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