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Should criminals be punished with lengthy jail terms or re-educated and rehabilitated, using community service programs, before being reintroduced to the society?

Punishment is used as a deterrent to reduce
crime
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 and is often served as per the extant of
crime
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, age and gender of criminal. The more severe a
crime
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 is the more capital is the punishment given including lengthy jail terms and even life sentences in some cases. There is a certain segment of
society
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 that believes that criminals should be rehabilitated and should be reintroduced to
society
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, rather than punishing them with lengthy jail terms.
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, I believe that
offenders
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 of serious crimes and serial
offenders
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 should not be rehabilitated, and they deserve stricter and longer jail terms. With the increase in the
crime
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 rate around the globe, the demand for harder laws and strict punishments is increasing. There is a thought that only with the hard punishments, people can be made afraid of the law and
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crime
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 rate can be lowered.
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, some people advocate that serving a death sentence to a convict of murder or rape will put the fear among people not do
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crime
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 ever.
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, stricter punishments to lower the
crime
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 seems to be the need of time.
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, there is a part of
society
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 that feels that by re-educating the convicts through community service programs, they can be rehabilitated. The argument is that most of the times, it is just circumstances and misguidance which leads a person to the path of
crime
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.
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, it has been seen that a person is stealing money just to get medicine for someone sick in the family because he cannot afford it
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. Children sometimes get involved in crimes like fights and drugs just because they are misled by fellow students or seniors. So, re-educating and rehabilitating them and making them serve the community as a punishment, can not only help them in re-entering
society
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 as
a
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good citizen but
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 can bring very positive changes in their future life. In conclusion, even though
offenders
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 can be reintroduced to
society
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 by rehabilitating them, as it gives them a chance to put their life back on track again,
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, rehabilitation program should not be for the convicts of serious crimes and serial
offenders
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 because they can be a threat to
society
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 if reintroduced.

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