Directors of large organizations earn much higher salaries than ordinary employees do. Some people think it is necessary, but others are of the opinion that it is unfair. Discuss both views and give your own opinions.

Big co-operates and multinational companies are led by leaders who are paid with high wages which they deserve.
This
is due to the fact that they are highly educated ,hardworking and showed
a remarkable skillsets
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remarkable skillsets
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in their fields.But the ordinary employees are
provied
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provided
less amount of money due to
number
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a number
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of factors
such
as years of experience and
level
of studies.In my opinion, directors of big enterprises have to receive the best
payement
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payment
compared to the common workers.
First
and foremost,individuals at the leadership
level
usually possess
high
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level
of education from great
universites
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universities
.
In addition
to
that
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,that
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they own more number of experience in their areas and they are
expertised
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expertise
in their domain.They might have tried so hard and faced numerous challenge to attain that role.
Consequently
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the organizations are liable to pay them
immensly
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immensely
.
For instance
,the director of the brand Pepsico has reached that role by her immense amount of effort throughout her career.
On the contrary
,
the
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regular staffs might not have done several years of work .
Also
,they do not have proper degrees or masters to fit in a bigger role.
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acheiving
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achieving
archiving
such
a
level
, they have to do
a lots
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a lot
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of
hardwork
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hard work
.These all factors constitute
to
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the reason for the lower payment of
usual
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workforce. To sum up,the main head of an
estabilishment
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establishment
has to be salaried exceptionally as they are worthy enough for it.
Also
,other workers have to be paid according to their efforts and experience
level
.
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