Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many people working not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

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, is the hectic work schedules of individuals, which can result in fatigue, exhaustion and tiredness, and they could not spare a small amount of time for themselves. They prioritise entertainment in half-day breaks to freshen-up the exhausted mind rather than

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, which is the result of fatigue.

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, recent scientific research conducted on the administrative staff in the UK demonstrates that more than 70% of individuals, who work overtime are obese and less physical

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is the primary factor of

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situation could be tackled by time management, if a person makes a time table for

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week and mention

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as a priority in their morning

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, and should follow it strictly.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 7.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

130 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Time constraints
Sedentary lifestyle
Passive leisure activities
Workplace wellness programs
Active commuting
Subsidized
Public awareness
Health benefits
Incentivizing
Accessible public spaces

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Many working people get little or no exercise either during the working day or in their free time, and have health problems as a result. Why do many people working not get enough exercise? What can be done about this problem?

Include an introduction and conclusion

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