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Some systems require students to specialize in a limited range of subjects from the age of fifteen. Other systems require students to study a wide range of subjects until they leave school. What are the benefits of these two education systems and which is better?

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It is no secret that education is a very essential part of life.
However
, there are differing opinions regarding school education. While some agree that
students
 should specialize in certain
subjects
 since the age of fifteen, others think that
students
 should
study
 a wide range of
fields
 until the end of school.
This
 essay showcases the positives of both systems and presents the writer's personal opinion. Regarding the
first
system
, which requires
students
 to be focused
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 certain
fields
, it has the advantage of helping
students
 explore deeper in their preferred subject.
Students
 can
study
 the
fields
 they are the most passionate about extensively and in
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 can master
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subjects
 before applying to college.
Additionally
, there are
students
 that are good in a certain range of subject and at the same time have weaknesses in other
areas
 of
knowledge
.
Hence
, by allowing
students
 to focus
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 the
subjects
 they excel
at
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, they are not distracted by studying other
fields
 which can
also
 affect their overall grades.
On the other hand
, the
system
 that demands
students
 to
study
 a variety of
subjects
 has its own benefits as well. In
this
system
,
students
 can learn various
areas
 of
knowledge
, and in
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 gives student
knowledge
 of each field.
Also
, by mastering many
subjects
,
student
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 can have more choices in applying to college and pursuing their future career. Personally, I do think that the
first
system
 is better. In my opinion,
student
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 should be able to choose their
areas
 of interest in
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 by high school or age fifteen. That way, they can learn about the
fields
 they liked the most.
Furthermore
, that can
also
 help
students
 to be focused
in
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 certain
areas
 of
knowledge
 and have a certain, defined choice of future studies and jobs.
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