Some people say that technology such as mobile phones (cell phones) is destroying social interaction. Do you agree or disagree?

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technology impacts how
people
socialize.
People
casually communicate via phone and the intensity of face-to-face communication is reducing nowadays.
This
impact of high usage of cell-
phones
raised a debate. I personally agree with the notion of cell
phones
replaces social interaction.
To begin
with, the
first
time
mobile
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phone was discovered, it constantly changed the way society communicated. It offered many features of entertainment which buffed the users. Even today, it is
a
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non-stop in releasing
many
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new entertainment
platform
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, yet, intoxicate the users.
For instance
, Instagram has a story feature
which
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allows
to update
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the factual events
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occurred
occured
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that occured
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in 24 hours. It
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effects
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affects
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people
to upload their daily activities even when
hang
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out with friends.
People
tend to
faking
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it to look close
with
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each other, while they actually engrossed in their own screen without having a deep interaction.
Furthermore
,
the
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mobile
phones
cannot replace
the
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natural social interaction. The nature of
human
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as
a social beings
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social beings
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to have kinships is unquestionable. Human needs to stay connected emotionally with their friends and family to keep them sane. The intimate conversation between two
people
is full of
warm
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atmosphere.
That is
something that communication via
phones
does not have, the
ambiance
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in deep talks will strengthen the bonding. To
conlude
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conclude
, human as social beings need to communicate naturally to have a strong kinship which is unreplaceable only by mobile
phones
communication.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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