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With the increasing demand for energy sources of oil and gas, people should look for sources of oil and gas in remote and untouched natural places. Do the advantages outweigh disadvantages of damaging such areas？

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The demand for energy sources of fossil fuels is continually rising due to the increasing population and industrializing.
This
 definitely results in exploring the sources of
oil
 and
gas
 into wilderness areas.
This
 essay will analyze
this
 phenomenon and illustrate a clear opinion. On the one hand, Exploiting new sources of fossil fuels is a noticeable benefit for people to maintain a normal life. Our lives, from womb-to-tomb, require a huge amount of natural
resources
 like petrol and
gas
.
In other words
, only non-stop exploring new
resources
, including taking risks to strange places can help us maintain a decent living standard.
For example
, we must fulfil many duties in our daily routine like commuting, which need to fuel petrol for public transportation and private vehicles;
additionally
, we need the power to light on, run a washing machine, and to charge our smartphone. All these activities need consuming natural
resources
 to supply directly or not.
On the other hand
, it is unfortunate that
oil
 and
gas
 are non-regenerated energy. Endless asking for natural
resources
 from Mother Earth, including untouched and unchanged places, which certainly leads to many eco-systematical issues, including posing a threat to wildlife and their habitats, contaminating the headwaters of rivers, desertification and so on.
In other words
, the damaged ecosystem gives us many feedbacks like drought, lack of potable water, global warming and abnormal climate. 
Consequently
, we have to pay for more intangible costs in order to combat those natural disasters,
in addition
 to the cost of using
oil
 and
gas
. In conclusion, according to the above analysis for the exploitation of natural
resources
 like
oil
 and
gas
, I pessimistically believe that the disadvantage of damaging outweigh the advantage of exploitation and demanding human will be in deep trouble because of greed.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • energy sources
  • industrial growth and development
  • economic benefits
  • job creation
  • revenues
  • technological advancements
  • extraction process
  • biodiversity
  • natural habitats
  • indigenous communities
  • displacement
  • traditional way of life
  • environmental disasters
  • oil spills
  • long-lasting effects
  • widespread effects
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