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LGBT community, as some people think their rights must be leagalised, whereas others diasgree, what is your opinion

The pie chart and the table illustrate the
energy
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 consumption proportions by different applications and electricity
units
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(kWh) used classified by the number of members in the residence respectively in Australia. Overall, heating and cooling, and water heating contribute more than half of the entire
energy
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 usage of a typical
house
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. On average, more than 5000
units
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 were used at a minimum by any household and it is observed that usage increased when the number of occupants in the
house
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 increases. Heating and cooling is the largest portion of the
energy
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 consumed in a
house
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 with 38% while water heating came
second
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 with a one quarter from the total.
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, fridges and freezers, and lighting were contributed with the same amount of 7% each, while cooking and stand by power recorded 4% and 3% respectively. All other applications like clothes and dishwashers, entertainment and small appliances covered about 16%. A strong positive correlation was shown in the
energy
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units
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 consumed respectively to the number of
people
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 in the
house
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. Typically, 5000 to 6500
units
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 were consumed per year where only a single occupant was present while 6000 to 8500
units
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 were used when two
people
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 lived in the
house
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. If three
people
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 were in the
house
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, it was recorded to use about 7500 to 10000
units
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 per year.
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, as expected with
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 trend, 12000 to 16000
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 were used on average if more than five
people
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 were living in the
house
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.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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