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In the past, when students did a university degree, they tended to study in their own country. Nowadays, they have more opportunity to study abroad. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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 university degree in your hometown country was popular in the past. Nowadays, people have more opportunity to
study
 abroad. It is indisputable that
study
 in your own country is the best way to achieve your goal due to the best facilities in the ways of living.
However
, there are many advantages of
study
 abroad that can bring
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worth
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 experiences to our lives. According to
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 statement,
study
 abroad can cause many issues during
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 in foreign countries, particularly in language barriers.
For example
, there are various countries that have their own unique languages but for
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international communication, it is obvious that English is the global language. Many students may face the problem of communication with their colleague when they
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study
 in different regions.
Moreover
, homesickness and the cost of living may weigh up the
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this
 kind of
study
.
In contrast
, there are many benefits to
study
 abroad while you are completely mature as age over eight-teen years old.
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life experiences in different cultures and environments are the
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 assets for young adults.
For instance
, it helps
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 to broaden their perspective
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 things that they never experienced in their life
such
 as foods, traditional or religions.
Moreover
,
study
 abroad makes the improvement of language fluency and
this
 is
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 special skill that can bring more opportunity to work in a better position in the future. In conclusion, there are several advantages and
disadvantages
.
However
, the
disadvantages
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 scenarios or they can be
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overcome. So do not let the
disadvantages
 of studying abroad put you off making an important life decision that will bring you a wealth of benefits.
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