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Now a days some parents give money to their children if they perform well at school. Do you think this is good or bad friend ?

#parents #money #children #school #friend
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It is certainly true that proper parenting is never easy as seems,
parents
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 need to concern about various factors as
different
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the different
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 stage of their
children
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 age. One of
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this
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 is
trend
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the trend
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 of giving
money
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 if they perform best in
school
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 activities. I agree that
this
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 is a very good trend. In subsequent paragraphs, I will discuss the reasons
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 my belief with relevant points.
Firstly
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, if
children
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 perform well in
school
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 , they should be motivated
inspired
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to inspire
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 them to do much better.
Also
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,
money
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 can explain
them
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to them
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 the significance of it. So, they use
this
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money
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 very carefully and only
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then
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when
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 there is a requirement or good purpose which cause early maturity in
school
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 students.
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, when I visited my
friend
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, I saw his child doing excellent in
academy
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the academy
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 as well as he knows the value of
money
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, after discussing with my
friend
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 I knew that he gave the
money
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 to his son every year for best achievement in
school
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.
Secondly
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,
this
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friend
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 teaches the
children
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for
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about
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 financial
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apply
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in dependence
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independence
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. They learn what is the value of
money
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 and how it
is need
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needs
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 to use consciously.
This
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also
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 creates
the
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respect in their young mind
to
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for
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 their
parents
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 and understand how their
parents
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 have
onus
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the onus
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 to cope
the
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with the
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 situations in parallel to give education to them. All these things cause
positive
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a positive
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 influence on young minds resultantly.
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, once
parents
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 give
money
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 to their youngers, they just initiate to engage their
children
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 in financial matter.
In
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ring
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 run, there
is
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are
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 crucial advantages for
well-bred
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a well-bred
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 society.
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, I think that it is
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 good
friend
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 if society
understand
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 it positively with their plethora of benefits.
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