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Now a days some parents give money to their children if they perform well at school. Do you think this is good or bad friend ?

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It is certainly true that proper parenting is never easy as seems,
parents
 need to concern about various factors as the different stage of their
children
 age. One of these is the trend of giving
money
 if they perform best in
school
 activities. I agree that
this
 is a very good trend. In subsequent paragraphs, I will discuss the reasons for my belief with relevant points.
Firstly
, if
children
 perform well in
school
 , they should be motivated to inspire them to do much better.
Also
,
money
 can explain to them the significance of it. So, they use
this
money
 very carefully and only when there is a requirement or good purpose which cause early maturity in
school
 students.
For example
, when I visited my
friend
, I saw his child doing excellent in the academy as well as he knows the value of
money
, after discussing with my
friend
 I knew that he gave the
money
 to his son every year for best achievement in
school
.
Secondly
,
this
friend
 teaches
the
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children
 about financial independence. They learn what is the value of
money
 and how it needs to use consciously.
This
also
 creates respect in their young mind for their
parents
 and understand how their
parents
 have an onus to cope with the situations in parallel to give education to them. All these things cause a positive influence on young minds resultantly.
Finally
, once
parents
 give
money
 to their youngers, they just initiate to engage their
children
 in financial matter. In long run, there
is
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 crucial advantages for
well-bred
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 society.
Hence
, I think that it is
entirely
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 good
friend
 if society
understand
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 it positively with their plethora of benefits.
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