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It is generally accepted that families are not as close as they use to be. Give some reasons why this change has happened and suggest how families could be brought close together. Include any relevant examples from your experience.

#families #change
In
this
 modern era of advancement of science and
technology
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 it is bound
true
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 that family bonding has been diversified. On the
one
 hand, it can be accepted that it is due to modernisation of localities and where
one
 attracts to cities rather than rural areas.
This
 makes their
families
to
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move from their ancestral origin to the global cities leaving their
grand parents
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 at their native bodies.
This
 results in lesser communication with them. So, to overcome and to have closeness with their
families
one
 has to spend some quality time with their
families
 by taking a leave for
one
 day or two
atleast
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at least
 a month.
On the other hand
, it can
also
 be the reason that many youngsters are likely to pursue their higher studies in other nationalities so that it makes them
to
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earn their bread at a faster pace. After completion of their graduation, they are busy in their own lives by working and even there is
difference
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a difference
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 in local timings where they are living their livelihood.
This
 gives them
lesser
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 chance to have a chat with their
families
.
Hence
one
 has to take time in their busy schedule to talk with their family for a smoother bonding. All in all, looking at the argument in
this
 light we can feel that
families
 are not as close as they used to be and where modernisation separated them apart.
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