Some people think that money is one of the most essential factors in promoting happiness. Do you think people can be happy without much money? What other factors contribute to happiness?

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Money is the most essential factor in everyone's life as making property or to earn payment, a person has to work. The essay is a challenge for the people who think that

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can buy happiness and to prove that people can be happy without much wealth. Though wealth is our life's motto to survive in a challenging and adventurous world, does not mean that wealth is everything. According to some people, it is the only way to praise someone or to get something for our loved ones through which they will be happy. But I think that we don't need huge

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to find our enjoyment. I would rather say that we can be even much happier with a little property or no

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. To earn a lot of

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, we might choose the wrong or some criminal way due to which we may face the consequences.

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. A man working in a Government office may accept a bribe to feed his family in five-star restaurants or to buy some valuable for his family and may go on as the demands of his family may increase. But they will be happy just for a few days not for a lifetime. In our another example, a simple working individual who earns a regular weekly or monthly income is much happier as he and his family know the hard work he is doing to earn a salary and same while spending they keep that in mind and limit their expenses but the same time they are saving fund for the future and it can put a smile on their face. According to me the factors which contribute the peace of mind is always your family as they are the one who stays behind a man who is solely responsible, their support and love make that man work proudly. Another thing I would like to mention here is we can get happiness by sharing your talks, your experience, your achievements especially with our children which may help them in their future, they can make brilliant decisions and walk on the path of

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happiness which we have shown them.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

357 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Promoting happiness
Essential factors
Financial stability
Material wealth
Personal fulfillment
Contentment
Basic needs
Maslow's hierarchy of needs
Social connections
Pursuing passions
Well-being
Mental health
Spiritual practices
Personal growth
Community service
Societal contribution
Philanthropy
Joy
Satisfaction
Prosperity

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Some people think that money is one of the most essential factors in promoting happiness. Do you think people can be happy without much money? What other factors contribute to happiness?

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