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many people say that the only way to guarantee a good job is to complete a course in university education. others claim that it is better to start work after school and gain experience in the world of work. how far do you agree or disagree with the above views.

#people #guarantee #job #course #university #education #work #school #gain #world
geeting
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getting
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is not depends
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 on
unviersity
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university
 studies, but it mainly depends on what kind of job you went to join and be a part of it. Even the people who had a higher
educarion
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education
 certificate ,
they
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 need to training through their study years. which means in my opinion, that there is no statement better than
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. At the beginning point, academic studies are a must in many fields of
work
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 basic science, medicine,and law.Because if someone planning to be a doctor there is noways to be except the university degree, owing to the fact that doctors should know each part of the body before they begin to
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 any organ has a problem. By the same token, a
lawer
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lawyer
 can not defence of accused without knowing the laws and rules regional and international too. From the other point of view, go to
work
 after school has many
benefites
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benefits
, like experience and mixed up quickly with
socity
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society
. Nowadays there are many fields of
work
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 not need a
universty
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university
certfication
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certification
.
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, handmade, marketing, and all designs types
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contain a
lot
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 kinds
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 most popular kind
digital
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 design we see
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every minute we spent on apps.
This
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creative
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 to
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create
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 a design
illustrate
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that illustrate
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 the idea or project you
work
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • critical thinking skills
  • specialized expertise
  • on-the-job training
  • work experience
  • financial independence
  • career growth
  • hands-on experience
  • balanced perspective
  • internships
  • part-time work
  • academic learning
  • vocational training
  • apprenticeships
  • personal circumstances
  • financial constraints
  • career goals
  • individual aptitudes
  • well-paying careers
  • satisfying careers
  • specialized training
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