Some people think that the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as the unemployed and the homeless. Do you agree or disagree?

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environment, it is evident that most of the aged people become homeless after being uncared by their children. Some argue that the governing authority should take

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of all, it is needless to say that, most of the educated professionals are being left out without a job and

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being unpicked by various MNC's or PSU's due to higher competition among them.

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bodies like Telangana has taken necessary steps like 'Skill Assessment Training' to make them skilled professionals to earn their own bread for illustration.

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, it is bound to accept that disadvantaged persons and grown-up parents are not being cared for by their child. In fact, it has been seen as the nuclear family is superior to a joint family these days.

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generation are busy in their work-life and staying away from their families. And, to take

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is providing funds to build the old age homes as a measure. Apart, to eradicate

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another precautionary measure. To exemplify, consider 'Anatha Ashraman' in Hyderabad, which takes

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of the old aged people and

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of the disabled, aged people as their primary objective.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

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315 words

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Some people think that the government should take care of disadvantaged people such as the unemployed and the homeless. Do you agree or disagree?

Include an introduction and conclusion

The working week should be shorter and workers should have a longer weekend. Do you agree or disagree?

Topic 2: These days many families move to other countries for work. Some people believe that the children in these families benefit from this move. However, others believe that it makes life more difficult for the children. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.