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Band 6.5

Some people argue that air travel should be restricted due to pollution and excessive fuel consumption. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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The impact of
air
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travel
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 on the environment has been the topic of continuous debate in recent years, following the concern that more and more people refer to it as a convenient means of
travel
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. I feel that restrictions should be imposed on
air
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travel
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. The
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 undeniable factor is that
aircraft
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 accounts for a large proportion of
air
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pollution
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. Planes, either idling or taxiing, contribute a large part of local emission annually. There are some suggestions that
air
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travel
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 is one of the most suitable modes of transport for long-distance trips.
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 idea is,
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, fallacious. Trains,
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, can
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 serve as an optimal alternative, consuming less energy and causing less contamination. So it is highly recommended, that the government imposes restrictions for
intra
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inter
 country
travel
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. Along with
air
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pollution
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,
aircraft
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 can cause noise
pollution
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.
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 it is impossible to precisely measure the actual impact of noise on people’s everyday lives, its ability to increase anxiety and disturbance levels has been confirmed. Especially to those living in the neighbourhood of an airport and around the flight paths, noise problems created by
aircraft
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 is a headache.
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, the
air
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 is indeed the only fastest means of transport to fly across countries. So it should be operated in
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 a way that its strengths can be taken maximum advantage
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, by replacing old engines with cleaner ones, people can mitigate the negative effect caused by flying. In light of those facts discussed above, substantial consideration should be given to
pollution
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 caused by
aircraft
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.
Air
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travel
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 should be preferred only when there are no other means of transport available.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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