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Many students face difficulties when they move from high school to university. Why do you think students struggle with this transition? What can universities do to help students adapt more easily?

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It is true that lots of high school seniors find it challenging to upgrade to
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. There could be a range of reasons resulting in
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 present condition and fortunately, there are
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 some potential measures that
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 can take to tackle these issues. Finding it difficult to adapt to the
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’s atmosphere is something common between
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 entering
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 for the first time. The chief reason behind it can be actually the fear of
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 new phase of your life as a full adult. Attending
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 is a milestone in anyone’s life especially because it is mostly combined with moving out of your parents’ house since
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 may get accepted at
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 which are not located in their own hometown. Moving out and starting a new journey seems really exciting for most individuals;
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, in order to be successful in achieving your dreams you should possess qualities
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 as independence, initiative and resilience. All these mentioned can cause you stress, particularly when you have just started and are somehow naive. So, in order to help
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 get along better with the new conditions,
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 can run a campaign to support freshmen during the very first stages of their transition from high school lifestyle to
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.
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, some
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 organize specific campaigns for new
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 to help them get familiar with the city and so on. Something else that
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 can do is to ask seniors to hold some tours for junior
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 to explain to them the courses they should take or walk them through different parts of the campus. These all together can make a comfortable atmosphere for the new arrivals and speed up the transition time. In conclusion, attending
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 can be stressful and overwhelming for many individuals, but with the help of
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 staff and other alumni, the adaptation process can become much
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smoother.

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Coherence
Your essay is generally well-structured, but consider improving the logical flow by ensuring each point clearly connects to your central thesis. Transition phrases can help guide the reader through your arguments more smoothly.
Task Achievement
You have provided some good main points, yet these could be further supported with specific examples or evidence. Including detailed examples would enhance the clarity and depth of your ideas.
Task Achievement
You effectively identify the challenges students face and offer practical solutions, demonstrating a good understanding of the topic.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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