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Having different languages makes it difficult for people of different nationalities to communicate with each other. It would be better if there was only one language in the world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of everyone in the world speaking the same language?

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In the modern world,
language
have
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 a crucial role in connecting different
people
 around the globe. While some believe that having
a
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the
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 same
language
 globally could make things better,
other
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others
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 think the opposite.
This
 essay would examine the merits and demerits of implementing a single
language
through out
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throughout
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 the world.
To begin
 with,
firstly
,
introduction
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the introduction
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 of a single
langauge
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language
 could make
people
 communicate easily with others irrespective of their
country
 of origin which would open gates for many
people
 who would like to expand their businesses to other places. For
exmaple
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example
,
country
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a country
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 like China speaks Mandarin which has a detrimental effect on their business because most of the international companies are reluctant to the way they communicate as it is hard fo
tem
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them
 to interact. By the arrival of a common
language
,
this
 problem could be resolved and
as a
result
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,result
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 their trade chain could be boosted.
Secondly
, It would
also
 enhance the arts to break the
boundries
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boundaries
 of thoughts with the outside world which would create
a lots
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a lot
lots
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 of new artists and audiences.
On the other hand
, an identity of a region is based on
their
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the
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language
 they spoke and
in addition
 it is
also
 linked with the history they believe.
This
 could be ruined by the unique
language
 which could lead to riots within a
country
. To illustrate, India
have
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 around 28 states and have more than 20 regional languages in which most of
them
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which
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 are based on the ancient
language
 Sanskrit.
Disgarding
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Disregarding
Discarding
Regarding
 all the historical moments and creating a global
language
 could encourage a lot of
people
 to get involved with communal riots.
Furthermore
,
young
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the young
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 generation would not have any idea
on
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of
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 the background of
their
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the
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 regional
language
 they once had.
Hence
, it would make them forget about their ancestors. To conclude, I believe a new global
language
 would have an affirmative effect on
the
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apply
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society in terms of the economic condition as well as on the artistry of a
country
.
However
,
such
 a big decision would not happen overnight but could happen in the future as part of the evolution of the
language
 process.
Submitted by Ashith on

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