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Having different languages makes it difficult for people of different nationalities to communicate with each other. It would be better if there was only one language in the world. What are the advantages and disadvantages of everyone in the world speaking the same language?

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In the modern world,
language
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 a crucial role in connecting different
people
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 around the globe. While some believe that having
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 same
language
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 globally could make things better,
other
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others
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 think the opposite.
This
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through out
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throughout
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 the world.
To begin
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 with,
firstly
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,
introduction
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 of a single
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language
 could make
people
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 communicate easily with others irrespective of their
country
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 of origin which would open gates for many
people
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 who would like to expand their businesses to other places. For
exmaple
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example
,
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country
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a country
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 like China speaks Mandarin which has a detrimental effect on their business because most of the international companies are reluctant to the way they communicate as it is hard fo
tem
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them
 to interact. By the arrival of a common
language
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,
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 problem could be resolved and
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result
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 their trade chain could be boosted.
Secondly
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, It would
also
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 enhance the arts to break the
boundries
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boundaries
 of thoughts with the outside world which would create
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 of new artists and audiences.
On the other hand
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, an identity of a region is based on
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language
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 they spoke and
in addition
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 it is
also
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 linked with the history they believe.
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 could be ruined by the unique
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 which could lead to riots within a
country
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. To illustrate, India
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 around 28 states and have more than 20 regional languages in which most of
them
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which
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 are based on the ancient
language
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 Sanskrit.
Disgarding
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Disregarding
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 all the historical moments and creating a global
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 could encourage a lot of
people
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 to get involved with communal riots.
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,
young
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 generation would not have any idea
on
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of
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 the background of
their
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 regional
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 they once had.
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, it would make them forget about their ancestors. To conclude, I believe a new global
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 would have an affirmative effect on
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society in terms of the economic condition as well as on the artistry of a
country
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.
However
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,
such
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 a big decision would not happen overnight but could happen in the future as part of the evolution of the
language
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 process.

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