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You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words

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Good Parenting is
must
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a must
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now a days
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nowadays
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 looking at the children and their behaviour. According to some, parenting should include
as
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apply
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a subject in
the
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apply
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schools
.
Teching
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Teaching
 or guiding the children about parenting is one thing but at what
age
 ? and does
the
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apply
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schools
 are
the
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a
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 good option for that ? I partially agree with
this
 opinion. In
this
 essay, I am going to present my opinion. According to
me
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my
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, to understand parenting, children when they are young needs to know who are the
parents
first
, why are they called
as
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apply
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Mom and Dad? what is the relation they need to understand
.
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?
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 But at
this
age
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,age
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 they are unable to get these questions as they see the same faces
everyday
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every day
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 and from
that
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,that
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 they imagine or build
the
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a
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 relation with them. As and when they grow up , they see their
parents
,
grand
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grandparents
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parents
 and enough to understand when they are going to start their own family. Sometimes
this
 experience is not good that impacts
worst
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the worst
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 on a child's mind.
For example
. in
US
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the US
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 we see there are 3 divorces
gets
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that gets
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 filed against 5 where a child has to choose only one
parent
 either a Mom or a Dad which is not good, both are equally important for a child and his growth. Another point is if we start teaching parenting in
schools
 at
their
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an
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 early
age
 when
this
 is the
age
 to play, to draw, to read, to write but
definately
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definitely
 not to understand parenting. So we should include Parenting not as a subject in the school but as a kind of project or some seminar or a
fun filled
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fun-filled
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 act for ages above 10 years so that they can take
this
 as a positive wave and it will help them to be a good
parent
 when they soon become Mom and Dad. By
birth
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,birth
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 a
perosn
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person
 does not know the skills of a good
parent
. But
experience
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the experience
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 in life teaches him to be good or bad. But
schools
has
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have
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that
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the
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 power to mould
such
chidren
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children
 and show them to walk on the good path. The bonding of
parents
, love, care about everyone will be the best example in
this
 case which they follow and they will become a good
parent
.
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