Some people play sports when they are young but then stop doing physical exercises when they become adults. Why is this? What can be done to solve the problem.

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of
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people
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society actively get involved in
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at younger ages.
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,
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active involvement stops when they reach adulthood.
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priorities
when they reach maturity. There are a number of solutions
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could be initiated to solve
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with, the main reason for a person
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to
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, in the modern
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context, people are glued to
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advanced digital
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where connections are built on
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.
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, many individuals use
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and many other platforms to play virtual games with a stranger which is contradictory to what he or she has done as children.
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, the addiction to modern tech advancements
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not only disconnected them from
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society but
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have
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separated
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them from
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active involvement in physical
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. Another reason to consider is that the focus and priorities of
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humankind
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differ when they become adults.
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, a child will enjoy maximum freedom while
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focusing
on education and
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at
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early
days. But as adults, growing up means a shoulder full of responsibilities
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as taking care of family, securing a job, attaining academic qualifications among many other things. Having a load of goals might deviate a person from playing
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. There
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are
two possible solutions to address the discussed issues.
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and foremost, individuals are required to draw a line to themselves on being addictive to a digital
lifestyle
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. Screen time should be curbed and should actively
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participate
in activities
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as swimming, cricket, and much more with
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community.
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, if the person is employed he or she could join corporate events organized by
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the employer
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.
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would not only facilitate
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stamina but
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would strengthen the bond with participants. In conclusion, active involvement in
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might deviate from adulthood owing to change in
lifestyle
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and objectives in life,
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,
this
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can be solved by participating in
sports
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activities organized by local communities and corporates.
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